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Am I invisible?
Because you ignore me,
Am I that shadow on the ground?
Because you're walking over me.

Am I camouflaged?
Because you deliberately turn your back on me,
Am I alive?
Because you act as though I don't exist.

Am I dead?
Because you look at me as though I'm a spirit,
Am I just a colour?
Because you judge me as though I am.

Am I unwanted?
Because you make me feel that way.
Am I just a fish in the sea?
Because you caught me, but then you let go.

The colour of my skin doesn't defy the person inside,
Whether I'm Brown, Black, Yellow or White;
The words you use to hurt me,
Cannot take away my pride.
This poem mainly links in with prejudice and discrimination.

All this judgement on other lives needs to stop.
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AussieDidge Featured By Owner 2 days ago  Hobbyist General Artist

Sad to say that even in a progressive society like the one we have now (at least, compared to say 100 years ago) that prejudices and discrimination still exist in so many forms (and perhaps, even new ones too.) One day we can hope things will change, or even, contribute to the change ourselves.

 

Your sense of repetition and reason shines through here, highlighting the various ways one feels about being discriminated or seen to be inferior, and then your last stanza does a nice about-face and expresses belief and strength even in the face of adversity. You know you can’t control the colour of your skin, or the gender you wish to represent or whatever, yet you refuse to let that define you.

 

That takes a sense of courage; a thing people doing the discriminating may not have much of to begin with. Overall, a great showing and a great way to reinforce that people should love themselves regardless. Keep up the fine work! :)

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Simbalonso Featured By Owner 1 day ago  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! I agree; discrimination will never stop because there's too many judgmental and nasty people in the world. They don't like it when someone discriminates them, so why do they find the need to do it to others? It's stupid :(
If only people went by this quote: “Be the change that you wish to see in the world." - Mahatma Gandhi

I had to read this poem in front of my English class during a speaking and listening presentation. At the end everyone seemed shocked and kept asking 'Did you really write this?', but I never thought it was that good (but no one ever gives credit to themselves LOL!)

Again, thanks for the comment and kind words, much appreciated! :hug:
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AussieDidge Featured By Owner 1 day ago  Hobbyist General Artist
I'd call it a hypocrisy on their part. Or better yet: "If you're going to dish it out, you'd better be ready to take it.":RandomBoxingGlovePunch: 

A powerful quote for sure. I feel I want to be a writer one day, so this is how I practice; through poetry of different kinds and giving feedback like this. Hopefully it works, after all, I'm still young with a whole life ahead of me. :nod:

Hey, clearly you made an impact with this piece. It's nice that you're humble about it, but sometimes, give yourself that bit of extra credit for the work you do. One day it could change lives for the better. :nod:

You're very welcome, and all the best. :)
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thesynysterrev666 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful!
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Simbalonso Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :D
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Bryd013 Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I can see the resemblance of that to my literature piece. Well thought-out. Good job :thumbsup:
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Simbalonso Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, I appreciate the feedback :D
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Kagomemax8 Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Love!
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Simbalonso Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks :thumbsup:
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Kagomemax8 Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Welcome!=)
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